Monday, December 10, 2018

2019 - *NEW* Critique Offerings from THE PICTURE BOOK MECHANIC

*PROFESSIONAL CRITIQUES* available from a multi-published, traditionally published Picture Book Author in both fiction and non-fiction. 
 At present I have published books with Scholastic, Sterling and Beaming Books and Family Fun / Disney Publishing.
 I have published magazine articles with Highlights for Children, High Five, Spider Magazine, Family Fun, Writer's Digest, Writer's Journal and more. 
I am a former professional book reviewer who reviewed for journals 
like Riverbank Review and KLIATT
and have served on the Cybils Award Panel for the past three years, 
both in Fiction Picture Books and Elementary Non-Fiction and Middle Grade Non-Fiction.
My extensive resume can be provided upon request.


New pricing will be capped at one hour, and will be $25.00 an hour. This pricing will be for a limited time, so take advantage by purchasing critique packages. These can be purchased now, and used now OR in the future.

First, here's my BIO:

Lynne Marie is the author of Hedgehog Goes to Kindergarten - illustrated by Anne Kennedy (Scholastic, 2011), Hedgehog's 100th Day of School – illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Scholastic, January 2017), The Star of the Christmas Play -- illustrated by Lorna Hussey (Beaming Books, 2018), Moldilocks and the 3 Scares -- illustrated by David Rodriguez Lorenzo (Sterling, 2019) and Let’s Eat: Mealtimes Around the World -- illustrated by Parwinder Singh (Beaming Books, 2019) as well as two pending books in the series and more forthcoming.

She is SCBWI Florida Faculty, the Spotlight Feature Columnist for Children's Book Insider, a 12 x 12 Critique Ninja and Rate Your Story Judge (and Fiction PB Contest Judge) for the past two years. She was a Cybils Elementary / Middle Grade Non-Fiction First Round Judge for 2018 and a Picture Book First Round Judge for 2017 and 2016.

When she's not travelling around the world for her job as a Travel Agent, she lives on a lake in South Florida with her daughter, son, a Schipperke named Anakin and several resident water birds. You can learn more about her at

IMPORTANT CHANGES (Effective 1/1/19):
Any unused critiques will expire on December 31, 2019 (no exceptions) and will not carry into the new year. December critiques must be submitted on or before December 15, 2019. While I very well still may carry on with my quick turnaround of 1-3 days, it is not guaranteed, and critiques may be returned any time prior to December 31st.

Please note: NEW Critiques Requests *MAY* be sent after December 15th, of course, but a quick turnaround is not guaranteed.

TERMS: Payment received prior to services rendered, in the form of Venmo (@Lynne-Marie-1) Friends and Family Paypal OR Paypal with Fees ( Please note that this pricing is already heavily reduced, so I need to receive the correct payment quote, not a reduced payment with paypal fees taken out.


PLEASE NOTE: If you send the wrong amount by sending Paypal Goods and Services without adding on the Extra Fees, you will need to send a 2nd amount to correct the amount. So please be careful when sending. Either FRIENDS AND FAMILY or PAYPAL FOR GOODS AND SERVICES PLUS FEES (which I believe are around .30 plus 2.9% per transaction) or VENMO (a Paypal App) will be accepted. 

The rates below are for picture books for to 650 words or less. If your picture book is longer that this, there is a $5.00 surcharge for each additional amount up to 150 words. So, for example a Manuscript of  740 words would have a $5 surcharge and a manuscript of 875 words would have a $10 surcharge. If you are adding your 1-2 line pitch at the top, which is fine and highly recommended, please add $2.50 to the total. Honed pitches will get you attention in queries and in twitter pitches so this step is very important!

For these rates you will receive a multi-level, line by line critique which discusses several or all aspects of writing a story (beginning, inciting event, characterization, motivation, stakes, character flaw, attempts at solving the problem, deep dark moment, renewal, ending and take-away value, IN ADDITION to title, word choice, poetic devices, sentence length, point of view, syntax and MORE). Sometimes, I am able share comp titles.  If your manuscript is close, I may recommend a publisher to research.

Please note that while I strive in every way to get your manuscript back as quick as possible, due to popular demand and affordable pricing, I have quite a queue. Please know that I will do my best to get to your manuscript as soon as possible and turnaround time is now estimated at 3-5 days.

COST: $27.50 per picture book Manuscript (Full Manuscript up to 650 Words)

NOTE: You can buy more than one of these and get a discount if you PRE-PAY at the time of your first order. For example, $125 will get you five (5) Picture Book Critiques on account.

COST: $35.00 per picture book Manuscript

NOTE: You can buy more than one of these and get a discount if you PRE-PAY at the time of your first order. For example, $125 will get you FOUR (4) Picture Book Critiques on account, PLUS an extra 10 Minutes of Phone Consultation PER manuscript. Additional time can be added for $5 each additional 10 Mins.

COST: $37.50

NOTE: You can buy more than one of these and get a discount if you PRE-PAY at the time of your first order. For example, $140 will get you FOUR (4) Picture Book Critique / Consultations on account. Additional time can be added for $5 each additional 10 Mins.

COST: $50.00 for One Critique and One Revision Critique, when Purchased TOGETHER.
Follow-up critique on revisions, if not pre-purchased, will be $27.50 and will include a telephone consultation for any portion of 1 hour's time not used up by the critique. PLEASE NOTE this is ONLY if the critique falls in under 1 hours time.

COST: $7.50
Cover Letters, whether pre-purchased or not, will be $7.50.

COST: $7.50
Pitches will be $5.00 as an Add-On,.

COST: $12.50
We will pull up the critiqued manuscript and discuss for 1/2 hour.

COST: $7.50
Each session will be 10 minutes via telephone.

I will edit your bio for your query letter for an additional $7.50 charge.

I am happy to review Editor or Agent Comments for $10.00 per manuscript. Should you wish me to review (but not comment on) a prior version of a manuscript, that will also be $10.00 reading fee.

If you are requesting a turnaround of less than four days, please add a $10.00 surcharge per manuscript. I am normally quite quite at turning around manuscripts (with the exceptions of holidays or regularly scheduled vacations, but this will GUARANTEE a quick turnaround (exclusive of holiday or vacation).

If you wish me to critique a manuscript and compare it to a prior critique, you will need to pay my hourly rate, which is $25/hour, with a $60 minimum fee.

I am happy to make up a custom package to try and accommodate your needs.

Please feel contact me to check in and see if the sale is still valid, and/or for regular rates on pitches, cover letters, picture book manuscripts, chapter books and MORE.

Here is what current clients have said recently:

*New* I wanted to thank you again for your insightful comments. You really have great suggestions and are able to pinpoint the problems. Thanks so much. KB

*NEW* Thank you so much for these detailed and extremely helpful edits. I can't wait to dive back in and use all of your suggestions. KD

*NEW* Thank you, Lynne! I'm so grateful for your help with several of my stories. I think your two recent critiques in particular helped me catch the interest of agents! B.S. 

What amazes me about you is not only that you send the critiques out so quickly (you must have racing stripes on your red pen), but also that the quality of your critiques are so good. Your fee is darn reasonable, too. J.S.

You are efficient! Thank you so much for your very helpful, speedy feedback! That was one of the most thorough critiques I've ever received. 

I want to say thank you for your critique of my story. I’ve had a chance to review it a few times and your notes and suggestions will be extremely helpful for my revision. I obviously have a lot of work still to do on this story, but I want to continue to develop it into, hopefully a polished manuscript for submission. Your thoughtful and detailed critique has set me in the right direction.

You don't know how much joy you brought me when I saw your critique and that is priceless. Thank you for continuing to motivate me as a fellow writer. Alicia Minor.

Thank you so much, Lynne. Your insights on both of these pieces are incredible. You've given me a LOT to think about and I'm excited to tackle the revisions. Very much appreciated!

Many thanks for the detailed critique! I have already incorporated many of your changes and ideas.

Lynne Marie has been a critique partner for years. She has great insight into what makes a picture book work. And this is a bargain price— buy five! Sherry Hyberger Howard

Many thanks, again, for this extremely insightful and helpful critique! I can't wait to work on revisions.

Wow, you are awesome! I absolutely love the way you’ve commented throughout the document and your insights are just what I need.

Thank you so much and when I get back to revising this story, I’ll have all your suggestions to get me through.

I have never learned so much from someone's critiques as I have from yours. You make me see things so much clearer. They have been thoughtful and honest. You have no clue how much you are teaching me. Thank you SO much. I didn’t know what to expect with my first critique, but Lynne Marie made the entire process painless and enjoyable! My manuscript took so many necessary turns and twists that I didn’t even know I needed! Andrea Jaimes

Wow, you are awesome! I absolutely love the way you’ve commented throughout the document and your insights are just what I need.

Oh, my goodness! You are wonderful! You were so thorough and exceeded my expectations. It is quite evident that you spent some time on the critique. I would love for you to critique the revision and will get back to you once I feel it is ready. Thank you so much! C.L.M. 

Thank you so much and when I get back to revising this story, I’ll have all your suggestions to get me through. K. 

 Thank you for your incredibly helpful feedback!  You have given me a lot to think about.

Man I learned so much. Truly grateful for all the insights! PM

Thank you for making a difference in my life and work. Devon Kondaki. 

Feel free to contact me for more testimonials. 

For a limited time, if you book a Vacation Package through me as a Travel Agent, I will give you two (2) picture book manuscript critiques of up to 750 words PLUS two (2) 15 minute telephone consultations. Details: Offers available upon final payment and only on packages which are non-refundable or have insurance. Not combinable with other Pixie Perks like Cruise Line Door Decorations, Onboard Credits or Gift Cards.

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